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Saturday, January 8, 2011

I Am Now Offering Critique Services

    Now--because I love to read and write I am offering Critique Services for fiction stories. I will read through your manuscript and check for grammatical errors and offer a bit of advice. Here are the terms:

1. Prices are $5 plus postage for manuscripts up to fifteen single sided pages, $10 for 15-30 pages and $15 for 30-80 pages. Postage is usually around 2-4 dollars. I will read fiction in any genre, nonfiction in a few circumstances. (DISCLAIMER--I am not a professional editor and don't pretend to be. You will see that in the prices. Right now I am just interested in helping others out.) If any of you are very talented and proficient in the blogging area (buttons, headers, etc.) we can work out a trade too.

2. You must be under 20 years old for me to read your manuscript at these prices, and you must be unpublished. (self-publishing and small- town newspapers excluded)

3. I probably won't catch every single grammar error, but I promise to do my best and I will probably find quite a few. As for advice, I always try to be kind and helpful and please take it that way. I will offer suggestions on plot & character expansion, foreshadowing, dialogue, etc. but will leave it up to you on how you want your story.

4. If you are interested, please email me at redheadkid7@msn.com with a brief synopsis of your story and when you plan to send your manuscript. I will send you a confirmation email when I receive your manuscript and payment. Please give me about two weeks to complete the critiquing, I will always try to be efficient but if circumstances make it so that I require more time, I will email you and let you know.

Dew you Like Moutain Dew?

     *This is a blog after all, and I think it's time to take a break from all the writing stuff and have some more of personal stuff! =) *
   
      Some weird pictures that my sister took. I miss my Summer DQ days and was frying up some grub for the kids. (I know, unhealty!) with my Mountain Dew Tee. (while taking a break now and then to play some tunes! after washing my hands up of course) I just happen to be extra supper efficent when it comes to frying food and doing something else at the same time. (How else do you think I can accomplish so much in the summer?)
  My sister said, "drink some and I'll take a picture of you!" I was like, "Whatever!" but if you want to see some pictures of me, here you go. Too bad I don't have a kind of photoshop to edit myself a little bit. I wasn't ready for any pictures, but I guess this is more truthful anyway cause it's what I look like a lot of times when I'm at home and nobody cares what I look like. I was going to scan in a pencil drawing that I drew that I thought was kind of interesting and related, but now our scanner isn't working. *sigh*
  I'm trying to learn the song "Free" by Switchfoot and I just couldn't figure it out until suddenly I realized: It's in a different tuning!! (drop d)
   I've got most of it learned, it's just the one hard part with the string bending. (You can hear it if you listen to the guitariest [wait! is that a word?] sounding sound) And also the fact that I don't have a distortion pedal, which makes it sound so weirdly wrong. But oh well.


It had been a long day-don't judge me so much on how I look.
I don't even think I had makeup on. :)


Doesn't my brother look weird?
     I'm hoping that I can save up my money and buy a little video recorder so that I can put up youtube videos of me playing some covers of songs. People never believe me when I say I can play, and it's not like their going to hand me an electric guitar to show them! I also get very, very nervous when I play in front of people, any people. Anyone else?
     Have a fun day!
   Mattie

Here's a cool link for guitar players too: ( online guitar tuner )http://www.gieson.com/Library/projects/utilities/tuner/

Friday, January 7, 2011

Bad News

   Did you like the first chapter of Appaloosy? I hope you could read most of it without your eyes watering.
   I have bad news. I called the publishing house today and they said that my books (Dusty's Trail) will not be ready until Jan. 20. I also owe them $280. $280!!!!!
   How did the 1/3 payment work out from 203 to 283? I don't know where these charges are coming from, so I'm asking them to send me a itemized bill. And of course it has to come at a time when I am broker than broke.
     For those wishing to publish their own book (I know there probably are a lot of you) : I DO NOT reccommend Morris Publishing!  They have done a great job on my covers, but they are
  • Very Expensive!
  • Very Slow!
  • Not very efficent
  • And sometimes crabby.
     I am not going to be using them for my next book. These books may end up costing more than I will be selling them for!! $700-$850 for a hundred copies, you can see why that doesn't work.
    They have been working for more than a month on this book. I sent it in around the beginning of December. They told me 20 days but apparently they took a long time off for Christmas.
     They charge extra for ANY changes that have to be made to your book. Pages, cover, any minute detail will cost you extra, and they want you to basically do everything yourself. To design my cover cost about $210 itself and I know they didn't spend more than a couple hours on it. (It is a very simple design.)
     I was assigned a person who seems like she doesn't like me, when she talks on the phone to me she always sounds annoyed.
     So you can see that I've simply taken down to countdown. I'll have a post when the books finished. I am so disapointed!!!!!!!!! Sorry for the rant, but a lot of you are authors and can you feel my pain? Or at least know what I'm talking about.

Feeling let down,
♥Mattie
   

Thursday, January 6, 2011

Appaloosy

Chapter 1
A Storm Brewing

     (Please ignore all the typos. I had to type this all by hand because I don't have the original disk. Please comment and tell me if something isn't understandable though!)

     One warm spring day in east Oregon, a young stallion who was called Blackhawk stood watching over his small herd. He was a handsome black Appaloosa, with a broad white blanket spread over his hips, a thin stripe running down his face, and two white stockings on his forelegs. He looked up at the sky, where a dark mass of clouds was forming. The knee-high prairie grass was bending gracefully with the wind and the air was becoming cooler each minute.
  Yes, there was a storm coming and Blackhawk wanted his mares to be prepared. He let out a shrill call to the horses, warning them to find shelter quickly. In a matter of minutes, it was pouring rain, and when Blackhawk was finally satisfied that all of the horses were safe, he went to see his own beautiful brown mare who was in foal to him. She was called Misty and she was his very favorite. She wanted to give him a big, strong colt very badly, but he would be pleased with whatever she gave him, colt or filly.
     He trotted up to the forest where his mares had taken refuge. The trees formed a natural shelter from the raging storm. He came up slowly to where his mare lay on the forest floor and nickered. She looked up and returned his greeting; she was always happy to see her mate. He nuzzled her and then examined her growing stomach.
     The rain dripped steadily and made a soft drumming noise in the surrounding foliage. Water streamed down the powerful stallion's neck and legs. He shook his mane, showering his surroundings with water.
      Misty looked up at him and smiled warmly. "The humans will come soon, won't they?" the young mare asked Blackhawk.
     "Yes, they will," the black stallion answered calmly, " and so will your foal."
     Misty snorted happily. "Our first one together," she reminded him.
     "Yes, and from the size of it I'd guess there is a big, strong colt in there."
     Misty only laughed. Blackhawk nuzzled her affectionately and then was off to see to other matters. He hoped the foal would be born soon.
   "The foal will most likely be born tonight," thought the stallion to himself. "They always seem to be born at the most inconvenient times." He chuckled.
     Unfortunately, he was right.
     The next morning a thick mist hung over the valley. When Blackhawk awoke, he immediately noticed that his favorite mare was missing.  He quickly stood up and started looking for her. He left the forest and looked around the herd, and outside of where they were grazing. The longer he looked, the more worried he became. She could have somehow been separated from the herd, or chased down by a predator!
     But after some patient searching, he found her grazing a few hundred feet from the herd beside a small flowering tree. He trotted over to her and just before he got there, he saw a flash of what was a brown colt dash behind his mother.
   He snorted in surprise, but then lowered his head and gave a small whicker, and the colt stuck out his tiny head. Then he stepped out from behind his mother.
   He was lovely chocolate brown in color, with a large white blanket that nearly stretched to his withers with many round, dark spots, and one pure white stocking on his long hind leg. He had a beautiful double colored mane, and a small white star on his forehead. He was just perfect! The stallion was full of pride for his first son.
     "I'll call him Storm," he said softly as he nuzzled the little brown foal.
     "I know he will be a mighty son of Blackhawk," Misty answered. The colt gave a high-pitched neigh, and the stallion nickered, and then left Misty and his new son.
     I was that colt. I grew fast and loved to play games with the other little colts and fillies. I would always beg my father to race me, even though I knew he was much faster than I was. I quickly became a small ball of energy, running, bucking and playing all day long.
     The one problem I had was with boasting. My father was constantly reminding me to be humble and kind toward the other horses. But I loved to fight with other colts my age, even older ones, to show my power. Even though play fighting would teach us things that we would need to know as adults, my father and the other mares would always keep and eye on us to make sure that we wouldn't get too rough.
     Being a colt, I was naturally curious. One day, as I was playing with tow other young foals in a green meadow, I heard a strange rattling noise.
     I swung my ears back, and soon found that it was coming from a little off to the left in a bush  . . .

A Preview of Appaloosy

 Storm is a beautiful brown Appaloosa Stallion belonging to the
famous Nez Perce tribe. He hates living the domesticated life and is
determined to escape and run free across the open west with a wild herd.

Instead, he is given to a young brave named White Feather and, surprisingly, the two
bond together as everlasting friends. But when war breaks out in the Idaho wilderness Storm's
life is turned upside-down. He is captured and taken to live with white men.

After being sold twice and facing many unique challenges, he comes to live with Faith,
a young girl living on a small farm with her family. The two soon become inseparable, and Storm
was content to live with her for the rest of his days. But when he is stolen by rustlers
heading west, once again circumstances have spun his life around.

When he is finally able to free himself, he must decide between returning to Faith . . . .
or the chance to be free.

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This is what is printed on the back of the book. Dusty's Trail definitely had a major conflict point that I was glad to post a few weeks ago but I think that Appaloosy has more of the conflict spread around, so I will publish the first chapter here, though the first chapter and the last are surpisingly different.
    I'm writing this before school, but now I've got to go. I will post chapter 1 of Appaloosy later after school. I hope you guys will like it!
♥Mattie

Wednesday, January 5, 2011

Wednesday Writing Tip

Top Five Ways Writers Bore Readers (continued)

Okay, here are the last two ways.

#2. Lack of Literary Devices

There are a lot of people who fail to use any literary devices in their story. Yeah, we know that you don't plan on your book becoming the next great American Novel, (at least I hope so!) but you could still use some of those authors' tricks. Books without any literary devices make for okay reading, but for it really to shine add at least some of these into your stories:

Irony
Foreshadowing
Subplots
Flashbacks
Onomatopoeia
Allegory

#1 Failure to Spotlight the Main Character

I'm not sure if this qualifies as the top way, but it's what I've finally come to. This story is about your main character, the one person (or horse) that you poured all this work into. You can have secondary characters; pretty much all of my books require secondary characters because all horses have riders and other horse friends, but you don't want to focus on their stories.
     Sometimes I will find my book gravitating towards secondary character's lives and such. If I find that happening I quickly try to set it straight, or rearrange it as a subplot. Faith's family problems in the book Appaloosy is an example of a subplot.
     I've read stories that people have written where they tell the story of ten different people! That's great if you purposely want it that way, but if you want your novel to be great, readable, and not boring, then follow the story of your main character.

* * *

     Okay now that I've gotten more followers too I've been asked the question, "What is the book Appaloosy about?" And it's not just local people reading this blog anymore. So, tomorrow I plan on putting up a Synopsis and maybe a Book Excerpt and/or the beginning of the book.




So Don't Miss It!!      

Mattie



Tuesday, January 4, 2011

Book Review: The Seven Habits of Highly Effective Teens by Sean Covey

  Hi Ya'll--I'm going to be doing a book review every now and then based on what I'm reading and how much I liked it. I know some of you don't quite yet fit into the "teen" category, but this is the book I just finished reading so it's pretty fresh in my mind.



The Seven Habits of Highly Effective Teens is exactly what the title portrays: The Seven Habits
  1. Be Proactive
  2. Begin with the End in Mind
  3. Put First Things First
  4. Think Win-win
  5. Seek First to Understand, Then to be Understood
  6. Synergize
  7. Sharpen the Saw
   I found this book hard to put down. It is very inspirational but is written for the teen's short attention span. It motivated me to go out and do things, to straighten the areas of my life that needed to be straightened, and to make goals and strenghten my relationships. I really liked the little side cartoons, too.
     This book isn't Christian, but it isn't completely secular either. Covey does encourage you to seek God, but he isn't endorsing Christianity and the Bible. There are some tough subjects covered like drugs, alcohol, etc. but these things do exist in real life and should be taken in stride.
     Sometimes it seemed like he could possibly be talking down to his readers. (not a lot though) and it may be hard to read from a Homeschool viewpoint, though the advice is helpful to homeschoolers, too.
     I liked Covey's informal viewpoint and how it seemed like he was talking to me. One part of the book I especially liked was a part where it helps you to discover you're true personality. At the end of each Habit it also gives you a list of things to do in real life to help you live out that habit.
     Here's an example from one habit: Pinpoint when and where it is most difficult for you to refrain from gossip. Is it with a certain friend, in the locker room, during lunch? Come up with a plan of action to avoid it.     
     I think the best part of it is the way he gives you ideas on how to make each habit a part of your life. There's obviously a reason why this book is a bestseller, and I know that the reason is basically because it's just a great book. I would recommend this for ages 13 (the absolute youngest) to about 20.
     My rating:   * * * * out of five.